December 15, 2014

In Good Time

All in good time, dear. All in good time.
For it tugs relentlessly at our heels
Settling scores for every moment lost
Amid those crumpled sheets we leave behind

All in good time, dear. All in good time.
I'll catch up with our two-dimensional dreams
Be more than a silhouette for you to love
Be what you hide in your whispered rhymes

All in good time, dear. All in good time.
I'll taste the cravings of your naked soul
Scarring the infinities that say "it can't be so".
While I wait for the next-in-line.


Photograph by Robert Doisneau


Linked to: Magpie Tales

Note:
Writing a crudely structured rhyming piece after a very long time. I hope the last line caught you off-guard. And I also hope you cannot decide who the actual speaker is.

Love can be as glorious as it can be fickle, right? :)

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26 comments:

  1. brudbergDecember 15, 2014 at 7:25 PM

    Yes that final line caught me unaware.. and it can mean a lot of things really.. I really find it be a little sad.

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    1. Preeti S.December 16, 2014 at 12:00 PM

      It is indeed, sad. Love is one of the things that is so powerful that one cannot really comprehend how it can be as transient as anything else. It transforms so freely that we sometimes have difficulty keeping pace with it. But that it just how I perceive it.

      Thank you for stopping by! :)

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  2. Vandana SharmaDecember 15, 2014 at 8:59 PM

    good job girl!! very nice twist!

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  3. hyperCRYPTICalDecember 15, 2014 at 10:28 PM

    Clever write. Well done.
    Anna :o]

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    1. Preeti S.December 16, 2014 at 12:02 PM

      A bit cliched too, don't you think?

      Glad to know that you liked it. Thank you. :)

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  4. Yvonne OsborneDecember 15, 2014 at 11:21 PM

    Nice use of repetition.

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    1. Preeti S.December 16, 2014 at 12:03 PM

      I used repetition coupled with rhymes after a long time. It turned out better than I expected. Thank you for reading. :)

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  5. Tess KincaidDecember 16, 2014 at 1:50 AM

    The repeating line works so well...nice...

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    1. Preeti S.December 16, 2014 at 12:03 PM

      So glad to hear that. Thank you for reading. :)

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  6. AnonymousDecember 16, 2014 at 11:40 AM

    That last line caught me so off-guard I had to go back and start from the beginning again just to see how I missed it coming! Great job.

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  7. Silent Otto December 16, 2014 at 6:09 PM

    You scarred those infinities , you let the love shine ....

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    1. Preeti S.December 17, 2014 at 8:58 PM

      The infinities are already infinitely scarred. :)

      Thank you for stopping by!

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  8. RommyDecember 17, 2014 at 4:58 PM

    Oh yes, I caught the twist! And I love the ambiguity of the speaker's identity.

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  9. SuyashJDecember 17, 2014 at 5:14 PM

    The second verse is just one beautiful verse

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  10. LocomenteDecember 18, 2014 at 5:25 PM

    So soulful...

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  11. LeoviDecember 22, 2014 at 9:26 PM

    Delightful poem, yes, all in good time, we must live every moment!

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  12. Ph_December 25, 2014 at 1:56 PM

    Still hanging on to the good times, just to live through these hard times :)

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  13. Optimistic ExistentialistJanuary 13, 2015 at 9:19 PM

    Definitely caught me off-guard with that last line :) well-done.

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  14. Jyotsna BhatiaJanuary 15, 2015 at 2:46 AM

    Beautifully written.

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  15. Ankita January 17, 2015 at 3:43 PM

    perfect prompt on the pic! loved the lines!

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